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How Web Site Inconsistencies Cause Confusion

It happens more often than you think. Something on a web site confuses the visitor and they freeze up. Whatever process they were in - researching, purchasing, etc. - has been brought to a dead halt.

A handful of these visitors might proceed to the FAQ page (if one exists) in hopes of finding clarification. An even smaller amount might fill out the web site’s contact form asking for an explanation.

Most, however, will leave.

It’s been pounded into us that the layout, colors and navigation should be consistent throughout the web site in order to avoid confusing the visitor. However, just as important, but often overlooked, is consistency in what the web site says.

Let me give you a couple of examples.

Inconsistency in the Product Guarantee

During a recent online shopping experience, I noticed that the product I was interested in came with a 30-day guarantee. When I got to the shopping cart, however, the company had a statement claiming all their products came with a 90-day guarantee.

Even though it really didn’t matter to me one way or the other, it distracted me. Instead of continuing with my purchase, I flipped between the product page and the shopping cart, trying to figure out why one stated 30-days and the other stated 90-days. Eventually, I did make my purchase. But I still don’t know which guarantee is the correct one.

Inconsistency in the Shopping Cart Options

In another situation, I was checking out an item I was thinking of purchasing, but hadn’t made a firm decision about yet. The web site said it was backordered, but was available for pickup at most stores. However, when I added the item to the cart, the option for store pickup was faded out.

In this case, I dumped the shopping cart. I wasn’t interested in waiting a couple of weeks for my purchase to be shipped to my home. I was, however, interested in purchasing it online and then picking it up at the store. But since their shopping cart wouldn’t allow me to select the “pick up in store” option, I would have had to call or visit the store if I wanted to make my purchase. And I had no intention of doing either one.

What We Can Learn

This lesson here is that inconsistency is a distraction that causes confusion. It has the potential to cost you the sale.

If you state you offer a 30-day guarantee on all your products, then make sure that the verbiage consistently states “30-days” throughout your web site. If the product is available for in-store pick up, then the customer should be able to choose that option and continue with their purchase.

How You Can Improve

Take some time to review your web site today. Are there inconsistencies in what your web site is saying to your customers? If so, you’ll want to make an effort to correct them as soon as possible.

In addition, are there certain questions that you get asked time and again by your customers? Then end the confusion by taking time to add wording to your web site that answers those questions. The more informed your customer is, the more confident they will feel about buying from you.

Remember - it’s always about the customer.

Why Frogs Don’t Sell Beer and Lizards Don’t Sell Vitamin Water

Clayton Makepeace of The Total Package posted about something that’s been on my mind lately. Do clever and creative TV commercials - the ones that get people’s attention and keep them talking for years - actually increase sales of the product they are promoting? In other words, do “good” commercials sell?

According to Clayton, the answer is no. And he backs up his claim by giving a real-life example of a Nissan commercial from the late ’90’s. You may remember it: The dashing action figure, GI Joe, escapes from the jaws of a dinosaur and rescues Barbie from a dull date with Ken by enticing her with his sporty Nissan. (You can watch the Nissan commercial here).

Entertaining? Yes. Memorable? Yes. But did it sell Nissans? Nope. In fact, Nissan sales plummeted. Their rival, Toyota, however, stuck with boring, customer benefit-focused commercials and their sales thrived. It wasn’t until Nissan pulled the commercial several months later that they were able to see their sales rebound.

And so Clayton says croaking frogs don’t sell beer (Budweiser) and Chihuahuas with a Mexican accent don’t sell tacos (Taco Bell). And I have one to add. Dancing lizards don’t sell vitamin water (SoBe).

I like lizards. And I grew up in the ’80’s, the era of Michael Jackson and “Thriller.” So the SoBe Life Water commercial that ran during the 2008 Super Bowl featuring lizards dancing to “Thriller” has been a recent favorite of mine. (You can watch the SoBe commercial here).

But when my 16-year old son picked up a SoBe drink at the supermarket the other day, I got to thinking. And I realized that as entertaining as that commercial was, it didn’t persuade me to buy SoBe. I didn’t drink SoBe before I saw the commercial and I never thought to try it after I saw the commercial, even after watching it numerous times.

So I headed over to the SoBe web site to see what they do - if anything - to convince people to try their products. Their web site consists of an opening Flash movie that’s cute and entertaining and fun. But where is the persuasion? The convincing? The benefits? Why should you or I or anyone else buy SoBe?

And so here lies the problem that plagues so many web sites: Like “good” commercials, they entertain, but they don’t sell.

Clayton Makepeace states that every ad (and yes, that includes web sites) should accomplish 4 essential missions:

  1. It must create a desire for your product by presenting the benefits it will bring into your customer’s life.
  2. It must convince your customer that the benefits obtained from your product are unique and not obtainable from competing products.
  3. It must leave your customer feeling that it is urgent to buy your product as soon as possible.
  4. It must compel your customer to action to purchase your product at the earliest opportunity.

Is your web site accomplishing these missions? If not, you’re probably losing sales.

Remember - it’s always about the customer.

Related Links:

Clayton Makepeace

The Nissan Commercial

The SoBe Commercial

The SoBe Web Site

The One Phrase on Your Web Site That Might Have Visitors Rolling Their Eyes

For 5 years, I belonged to an online consumer confidence/business ethics web site. The owner of this company promised to hold all members to the highest standards of business ethics and customer service. In turn, my membership was supposed to promote consumer confidence through a seal displayed on my web site.

When I sold this web site, I emailed the owner of the consumer confidence organization with a request to cancel my membership since it was not transferable to the new owner. And even though I have other web sites, I did not wish to continue my membership with this organization.

Here’s why: During the 5 years of my membership, I never once had a client tell me that they found me through this organization, nor did they express any increased confidence in my company due to my membership. I think it was because the organization simply wasn’t well-known enough, therefore, it wasn’t recognized by my customers to be something of value. The membership seal I so proudly displayed on my web site meant absolutely nothing to most of my site visitors.

But getting back on track here. A full week went by and I didn’t hear back from the owner regarding my cancellation request. I thought that was rather odd, so I emailed her again, reminding her of my cancellation and requested also that she remove me from her mailing list since there were no options to unsubscribe in her emails or on her web site (membership required that you receive her newsletter).

I’m assuming she received this email since I never received another newsletter from her. But she never did respond to me. She could have used it as an opportunity to try to retain my business or at least say she was sorry to see me go. In my opinion, her lack of response was unacceptable. After all, her business was about integrity, ethics and good customer service. Maybe she felt I wasn’t worth responding to since I was no longer a paying customer.

This is exactly why you can boast that you have the greatest customer service on the face of the earth and it means nothing to your site visitors. In truth, it probably makes them roll their eyes. They read promises of exceptional customer service on nearly every business web site, yet almost every business will fail - at some point - to deliver. Just like the consumer confidence membership seal on my web site, the words “great customer service” mean absolutely nothing to web site visitors.

Which brings me to the point of this post: Don’t waste valuable space on your web site claiming great customer service - unless, of course, you want your visitor’s eyes to glaze over while they mutter “yeah, right,” and click away. ;) Instead, use that space to tell your visitors what they want to hear through customer-oriented copy that is targeted towards their wants and needs.

Web site space is valuable and you have just a few seconds to capture your visitor’s attention and draw them in. Don’t waste it with meaningless, overused words.

Remember - it’s always about the customer!

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